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Properties of Exoplanets: Masses, Orbits, and Metallicities for Kids!
We all live on the planet
Earth. And we have a really hot and
bright sun that we revolve around. There
are also seven other planets that revolve around the sun just like us. There are large ones, small ones, hot ones,
cold ones, and even ones made out of gas.
Next time you look up at the night
sky, notice how there are many bright dots.
Even too may to count! Each one
of those bright dots is another sun like our own. They are so small because they are very far
away. Much farther than our own
sun. There are big suns, small suns,
dense suns, red suns, and even blue suns.
Many of these far suns have planets
just like our sun. There are large
planets, small planets, hot planets, cold planets, gas planets, and even
planets similar to our own.
Since these planets orbit far suns,
they are also really far away. Since
they are so far away they are really hard to see. They are so hard to see that we need to use
telescopes because we can’t see them with our naked eyes. Trying to see these planets is like trying to
see grains of sand that are all the way across town!
The people that look for these
planets are called astronomers.
Astronomers want to figure out many things about these planets. They want to know how heavy they are, how
fast the go around their far sun, how close to their far sun they are, what
they are made of, and even if there are things living on them.
Astronomers have many complicated
ways of finding these things out about the planets that orbit the far stars. They can measure how hard the planets pull on
the far sun they revolve around. They
can measure how much light they block from their far sun when they go in front
of it. And they can even measure what
kind of light the planets absorb.
Astronomers do this so they can
learn more about the universe that we live in, and also to see if any of these
planets could have living things on them like our planet Earth. Maybe one day, you could be an Astronomer too!
Observed
Properties of Exoplanets: Masses, Orbits, and Metallicities for Adults.
Astronomers are interested in
learning more about the planets that orbit stars. They want to know things such as their mass,
composition, and information about their orbits. Astronomers have various methods of doing this. They can measure the slight gravitational
wobbles of the stars that the planets orbit.
They can also measure the slight dimming of the stars when they planet
passes in front of it. They can even
measure the absorption lines of the planets.
Astronomers graph this data and try
to find trends in planets in order to better understand things such as how
planets form. All this information helps
advance the knowledge of the human race regarding our place in the universe.
Your transformation for the younger audience definitely has a great start! I like how you simplified a lot of the language down to be understood by kids. Another nice touch is that you introduced all the information piece by piece, so as not to overwhelm them with all of the information at once. It seems to provide an incentive for the audience to keep reading, especially since younger kids are curious, and have big imaginations. This genre also seems to have an inspirational tone to it as well, especially with the introduction of the possibility of becoming an astronomer in the last sentence; this is another great move that works well with young kids. My only question is, what specific genres are you using to model your transformations? It seems like your “older” transformation is very similar to the “younger” transformation with a few changes in jargon. That being said, this is a solid start to your WP3.
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ReplyDeleteGood work with putting your younger audience translation first. It definitely would appeal to a younger audience because it sounds like it comes out of a children s book or elementary school textbook. Your older audience translation needs a better focus that would differentiate it more from the younger audience translation. It seems like one is an explanation for very young kids and one is an explanation for older kids.They both seem to fall under a similar genre and it would add more diversity and depth if one of them was a different genre. Possibly think of some text that adults read that could include some mention about outer space, even if it isnt related to science.
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